Song About Depression
Discussion
Could I have some feedback for my latest?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wShF-h-3uRE
'Hostage Situation'
Cheers
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wShF-h-3uRE
'Hostage Situation'
Cheers
Percy Flage said:
Is that "get down" like in a black African American way, or "get down" as in feel a bit low from time to time? If the former, perhaps a livelier tune might help?
I believe it's more the latter. Both are stuck in situations that look difficult to get out of without affecting close members of their family. One lost hisMum in an accident 18 months ago and naturally gets pretty downhearted. I'm writing more upbeat stuff too, but just thought I'd attempt to capture what it can be like at times.
The Lukas said:
Percy Flage said:
Is that "get down" like in a black African American way, or "get down" as in feel a bit low from time to time? If the former, perhaps a livelier tune might help?
I believe it's more the latter. Both are stuck in situations that look difficult to get out of without affecting close members of their family. One lost hisMum in an accident 18 months ago and naturally gets pretty downhearted. I'm writing more upbeat stuff too, but just thought I'd attempt to capture what it can be like at times.
AllTorque said:
I like it but not that keen on the "bop badops" that run along in the background. Good work!
Are they real drums, or loops?
That's fair enough, it was just an experiment with catches, but it's actually saying 'rock bottom' which I was going to call the song itself, but seemed a but obvious and cheesy Thanksgir the feedbackAre they real drums, or loops?
The Lukas said:
AllTorque said:
I like it but not that keen on the "bop badops" that run along in the background. Good work!
Are they real drums, or loops?
That's fair enough, it was just an experiment with catches, but it's actually saying 'rock bottom' which I was going to call the song itself, but seemed a but obvious and cheesy Thanksgir the feedbackAre they real drums, or loops?
AllTorque said:
The Lukas said:
AllTorque said:
I like it but not that keen on the "bop badops" that run along in the background. Good work!
Are they real drums, or loops?
That's fair enough, it was just an experiment with catches, but it's actually saying 'rock bottom' which I was going to call the song itself, but seemed a but obvious and cheesy Thanksgir the feedbackAre they real drums, or loops?
Mr Will said:
I've just listened to it through twice and I quite like the tune, but you haven't really managed to connect with what it feels like to be depressed.
Thanks for a criticism. I believe I didn't do a bad job at conveying it, but I know I didn't go deep into it in the song. What does the song convey to you? The Lukas said:
Mr Will said:
I've just listened to it through twice and I quite like the tune, but you haven't really managed to connect with what it feels like to be depressed.
Thanks for a criticism. I believe I didn't do a bad job at conveying it, but I know I didn't go deep into it in the song. What does the song convey to you? The person is your song is too aware of his overall situation and too aware that there is something better out there to strive for.
Does that make any sense?
Mr Will said:
The Lukas said:
Mr Will said:
I've just listened to it through twice and I quite like the tune, but you haven't really managed to connect with what it feels like to be depressed.
Thanks for a criticism. I believe I didn't do a bad job at conveying it, but I know I didn't go deep into it in the song. What does the song convey to you? The person is your song is too aware of his overall situation and too aware that there is something better out there to strive for.
Does that make any sense?
Maybe then, it's not about depression but about being in a long term situation that make you feel like . Often they get confused, so it's a fine line I take it in many cases.
Edited by The Lukas on Thursday 28th October 12:26
Mr Will said:
The Lukas said:
Mr Will said:
I've just listened to it through twice and I quite like the tune, but you haven't really managed to connect with what it feels like to be depressed.
Thanks for a criticism. I believe I didn't do a bad job at conveying it, but I know I didn't go deep into it in the song. What does the song convey to you? The person is your song is too aware of his overall situation and too aware that there is something better out there to strive for.
Does that make any sense?
I think the OP should listen to Joy Division - New Dawn Fades. It's an obvious example of a depressed songwriter. He didn't make it much longer after writing that..
OP, it's well performed and produced. Unfortunately it's too poppy and upbeat to convey any sense of desperation and certainly isn't cathartic.
If the lyrics have a message then the music doesn't carry it, personally I'd change the words for a lighter subject matter.
Listen to this from 4.30 onwards http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xr__zWWcovM This is how to convey depression.
Best of luck for the future.
Rgds
If the lyrics have a message then the music doesn't carry it, personally I'd change the words for a lighter subject matter.
Listen to this from 4.30 onwards http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xr__zWWcovM This is how to convey depression.
Best of luck for the future.
Rgds
Having always liked writing, and realising I'm suffering from long term depression that's just taken a turn for the worse, I've thought quite a lot about how to put the feeling into words. Even when you're in there it's not easy to describe how it really is.
Think along the lines of no self worth and because of that, not even wanting to recover from it even if you could. It becomes an eternal loop which in a lot of cases is going to end in the person having a moment that gives them the courage and motivation to finally top themselves. That's at least a none-lyrical, matter of fact description of my mind of recent weeks.
Think along the lines of no self worth and because of that, not even wanting to recover from it even if you could. It becomes an eternal loop which in a lot of cases is going to end in the person having a moment that gives them the courage and motivation to finally top themselves. That's at least a none-lyrical, matter of fact description of my mind of recent weeks.
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