What do you think of my song 'Social Life'

[The Lukas]

Hey folks! Would like and criticism on this song as this is the music forum.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2hkEUWNds4s&fea...

Thanks

[T_Pot]

isnt that talking not singing?

sorry, not my thing at all, but far better than me im sure

[Pothole]

not my bag, good luck though

[lockhart flawse]

Enjoyed listening to it. I would

1)Bin the Mandolin...and the acoustic guitar. Instruments don't seem to match the song vibe.
2)Re-mix the chorus - there's a decent tune in there I think
3)The song should develop from the 2nd Chorus - either a bridge to a reprise and finish or a re-working of the original chorus to finish.

All IMHO.

L.F.

[The Lukas]

Thanks chaps

[Adam B]

needs a bit more depth of sound, maybe up the bass

main problem is the lack of charisma behind the singing, especially the backing vocals

lyrics seem a little twee - are you really singing about watching DVDs?

(sorry)

[As_Bo]

I don't know why but the chorus part reminds me of when Slim Shady sings.

[The Lukas]

As_Bo said:

I don't know why but the chorus part reminds me of when Slim Shady sings.

Because I dubbed it over using two octaves maybe...?

LOL lyrics... it's about having a crap social life mmm

Taken on board: I'll think more in depth for the next song

[As_Bo]

Two octaves has gone way over my head

[The Lukas]

As_Bo said:

Two octaves has gone way over my head

[evil len]

Oh I dunno, it's NOT what I'd normally listen to, but I think it's actually okay. Like the mandolin. Only thing I'd say is the chorus gets a bit "messy", undefined. It's certainly a break from the norm, and for that I like it

[The Lukas]

evil len said:

Oh I dunno, it's NOT what I'd normally listen to, but I think it's actually okay. Like the mandolin. Only thing I'd say is the chorus gets a bit "messy", undefined. It's certainly a break from the norm, and for that I like it

Agree about the chorus. It perhaps has too many tracks down in it, or maybe my mixing attempts didn't pay off in the fullest sense. Thanks for the criticism